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Dawn
A short poem |
| by A Fisherman | | posted on | 2008-12-14 02:40:07 | | views | 251 : last 2010-09-08 22:29:55 | | comments | 4 : last 2009-02-17 13:24:29 | | category | poetry | | rating | General | |
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Dawn
I hear it; in rattles, creaks and groans,
Across wide shoulders of rocks and stones,
In waters tumbling down through canyons deep,
Pinion heads swaying; below, deer run and leap.
The silence I hear is echoing all around,
Floating, trapped, between sky and ground,
Even clouds whisper in soft and silky voice,
And birds, who laugh their songs of rejoice.
In an instant I would trade the city rush
For the majesty of the mountain’s hush:
Oh, what a dear price I would pay
For a moment more to stay
In a land painted gold
By morning’s first blush.
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© A Fisherman, 2008, All Rights Reserved.
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| Ed, as usual, your description is what creates a vision for the reader, I live surrounded by the very mountains you have descibed, and I wouldn't trade to live anywhere else. You have expressed the awe and the beauty of God's landscape and his lovely gift to us in a voice that we all can agree with. Lovely. Lori |
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| Thanks Steve. This simple poem was influenced by one of my favorite poets, William Butler Yeats. He used "I" in profusion in his poems. He received the Nobel Prize for Literature in 1923. |
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| if you went back through and eliminated the "I's," this would seem more universal. this poem should suggest instead of demand. too literal. |
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